Chkval Publish time 2015-6-15 04:54:00

SeiryuSky replied at 2015-6-15 11:41 static/image/common/back.gif
you guys are either lazy to read or lazy to reply WTH XD

was first to reply

well if u want my advice, start developing the story more. For example, instead of killing all humanity in chapter 1, you could've set the building stones with a little bit of description and scene drawing, and then kill all humanity in chapter 2.

But for now, work on developing what comes next more. Learn from Eiichiro Oda. It's about the journey and not the destination :D

SeiryuSky Publish time 2015-6-15 04:58:33

Chkval replied at 2015-6-15 04:54 static/image/common/back.gif
was first to reply

well if u want my advice, start developing the story more. For example, instea ...

well in fact i din kill humanity you just need to wait there is a lot of plot twist what you're seeing is nto the begining of the story yet it is an introduction :D

Chkval Publish time 2015-6-15 05:01:46

SeiryuSky replied at 2015-6-15 11:58 static/image/common/back.gif
well in fact i din kill humanity you just need to wait there is a lot of plot twist what you're se ...

more development, more scenes, more dialogues, more monologues, etc etc

Even an intro needs more of these

SeiryuSky Publish time 2015-6-15 05:06:42

Chkval replied at 2015-6-15 05:01 static/image/common/back.gif
more development, more scenes, more dialogues, more monologues, etc etc

Even an intro needs more  ...

nah intro is what you see before chapter 1 in a story starts  it is like 2 pages with a summary of what happened before a short one , if i put a lot of scenes and dialogues in it mean the story already started , like all books it should be just to tell the story of the past in a fast way in the least developpement possible so the reader don't get bored and enter the story fast without understanding

Chkval Publish time 2015-6-15 05:25:28

SeiryuSky replied at 2015-6-15 12:06 static/image/common/back.gif
nah intro is what you see before chapter 1 in a story starts  it is like 2 pages with a summary of ...

Gotta disagree with you, i like details.

Anw, your story, your rules :)

SeiryuSky Publish time 2015-6-15 05:38:35

Chkval replied at 2015-6-15 05:25 static/image/common/back.gif
Gotta disagree with you, i like details.

Anw, your story, your rules

well yeah i do like details anyway most of ppl here dun you know i should follow what most of ppl like :P anyway now the introduction nearly finished only 1 part then i start in chapter 1
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