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author: SeiryuSky    time: 2015-5-31 18:08:48     Title: the pearls and the hidden soul

his eyes closed lying on a the top of a mountain , his body with dangerous wounds and broken hand his blood wesseling on the ground , on the barren surface of the mountain , no humans live there , no animals even only a lonely man who in his life have known what no one have known , oh i forgot let's start from the begining ... the day "Amadai" was born , the day the parusan was stolen ... on the morning she get up with her baby in  and laugh with her husband , they are happy , their son will finally be born , the son of the "taiyo no kotei " all the imprial divan will clebrate that day , or maybe one won't , the son of the emperor, "katara" he was always treated as the emperor and tried to kill his father few times he never looked down to anyone , cz who don't look down to him got killed , and after the incident from 2 years  and the death of 1875 guards and 14398 inhabitants by him , He got sealed 5km under ground in the gaol of shadows , the " kage no kangoku" tied to 186 chains made from the steel of karai tamashi  that are supposed to get into the prisoner's soul and and make it disentegrate slowly and the dour made of Daiyamondo jikan that can never be broke and the only way to open it is the parusan , pearl of sun ...
6 days later...the son got born finally and the emperor celebrated with all the empire and named , his son , gomari , the new emperor , during the ceremonies , the pearl will be putten together finally with the necklace of the sun to name the baby as the successor , the only thing left now is the pearl , suddenly during the ceremonies the right hand of the emperor open the door aggresively and shout : where is the pearl ???? where is itttt ??? the emperor stand up and look at his friend with eyes of fear and then order the soldiers to search for the pearl while he will see something , the soldiers lope searching for the pearl but nothing , meanwhile the emperor have got to his secret room with his friend revealing fast his legendary outfit with the armor made from the skin of the dragon that was killed by the previous emperors and the sword made from claws , he knew something for sure , if the pearl was stolen...

the soldiers continue their search suddenly the shadow of a man appear , asking him who he is he disappear , only to appear behind them and kill them in a moment , he continue moving , and fear controling all who see him , the battle start between the empire and the mysterious man , the emperor arrange his army , to fight the enemy , or that is what he thought until an army of 50000 men of a mysterious area join the fight in the side of the mysterious man , the emperor hopeless look at his newborn son crying , call his friend and ask him to save his son and give him the necklace , because he is the only hope for the empire to be revived , his friend not accepting was obligated too for the sake of the empire , therefore he get on a horse hold the newborn baby and the neclace and advance away from the empire for the first time the battle start , and the two armies clash with the emperor waiting to battle the mysterious man .... he show up the emperor couldn't move he was frightening , the mysterious man ... was his son , katara smiles and look at his father a look of scorn then show him the pearl ,and laughs , to silentely kill him in a slice the empire have falled with no hope and the pearl taken , the empire turned to vacuum . gomari continue his escape with the right hand of the dead emperor , to suddenly be caught by the men of katara , , he hide the baby in a cover and fight the men of katara to only die , the baby discovered by the men and being unknown to them put him on a piece of wood and release him to the sea , where the end never exist ....


give me your opinion about it   i just writed it without thinking  so be a little calm and not so heavy with your opinions if i get enough likes ( 2 XD ) i will post the next part

P.s : braha i know you're gonna say it is for off-topic but general discussion is off-topic more than off-topic XD


author: Ragnos    time: 2015-5-31 18:10:42

Then you might want to delete a thread instead of double-posting.                        
author: Ragnos    time: 2015-5-31 18:11:15

SeiryuSky replied at 2015-5-31 17:11
nah i want ppl who come to off-topic and general discussion to read it so more ppl read XD i am sm ...

Then again some would see it as desperate...               
author: SeiryuSky    time: 2015-5-31 18:11:52

Ragnos replied at 2015-5-31 18:10
Then you might want to delete a thread instead of double-posting.

nah i want ppl who come to off-topic and general discussion to read it so more ppl read XD i am smart after all i am the toyda boss
author: MATTRAT    time: 2015-5-31 18:14:56

lol is this ur own story
author: SeiryuSky    time: 2015-5-31 18:15:53

MATTRAT replied at 2015-5-31 18:14
lol is this ur own story

yeah just created it when i thought of mystery when ragnos said mystery he gave me the idea lol
author: SeiryuSky    time: 2015-5-31 18:16:21

Ragnos replied at 2015-5-31 18:11
Then again some would see it as desperate...

ouh ok then i will delete that one or the other one ? the other one i think
author: Ragnos    time: 2015-5-31 18:18:03

MATTRAT replied at 2015-5-31 17:14
lol is this ur own story

Maybe you should check out Coffin of My Imagination in the Off Topic. Bleach Fan Fic by yours truly. Then there is Alvond the book I was writing.
author: SeiryuSky    time: 2015-5-31 18:26:12

Ragnos replied at 2015-5-31 18:18
Maybe you should check out Coffin of My Imagination in the Off Topic. Bleach Fan Fic by yours trul ...

yeah liked coffin of imagination BTW you liked my prediction ? XD and guys come and read at least even if you will say it's trash -_-
author: Ragnos    time: 2015-5-31 18:27:11

I never said it was trash. Plus I don't see any trash can around here.
author: SeiryuSky    time: 2015-5-31 18:28:00

Ragnos replied at 2015-5-31 18:27
I never said it was trash. Plus I don't see any trash can around here.

well i wasn't talkin to you i was talkin to forums visitors lolz XD only first sentence was for you XD
author: SeiryuSky    time: 2015-5-31 18:42:43

waiting for your opinions O_O
author: SeiryuSky    time: 2015-5-31 18:49:23

bump XDDDDDD
author: SeiryuSky    time: 2015-6-1 05:19:44

OMG IT'S HARD TO LET IT BE ALIVE IN GENERAL DISCUSSION O_O
author: SeiryuSky    time: 2015-6-1 08:24:26

1 like till now i need another one to write next one




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