the pearls and hidden soul - part 2

Chkval

SeiryuSky replied at 2015-6-15 11:41
you guys are either lazy to read or lazy to reply WTH XD

was first to reply

well if u want my advice, start developing the story more. For example, instead of killing all humanity in chapter 1, you could've set the building stones with a little bit of description and scene drawing, and then kill all humanity in chapter 2.

But for now, work on developing what comes next more. Learn from Eiichiro Oda. It's about the journey and not the destination

SeiryuSky

Chkval replied at 2015-6-15 04:54
was first to reply

well if u want my advice, start developing the story more. For example, instea ...

well in fact i din kill humanity you just need to wait there is a lot of plot twist what you're seeing is nto the begining of the story yet it is an introduction

Chkval

SeiryuSky replied at 2015-6-15 11:58
well in fact i din kill humanity you just need to wait there is a lot of plot twist what you're se ...

more development, more scenes, more dialogues, more monologues, etc etc

Even an intro needs more of these

SeiryuSky

Chkval replied at 2015-6-15 05:01
more development, more scenes, more dialogues, more monologues, etc etc

Even an intro needs more  ...

nah intro is what you see before chapter 1 in a story starts  it is like 2 pages with a summary of what happened before a short one , if i put a lot of scenes and dialogues in it mean the story already started , like all books it should be just to tell the story of the past in a fast way in the least developpement possible so the reader don't get bored and enter the story fast without understanding

Chkval

SeiryuSky replied at 2015-6-15 12:06
nah intro is what you see before chapter 1 in a story starts  it is like 2 pages with a summary of ...

Gotta disagree with you, i like details.

Anw, your story, your rules

SeiryuSky

Chkval replied at 2015-6-15 05:25
Gotta disagree with you, i like details.

Anw, your story, your rules

well yeah i do like details anyway most of ppl here dun you know i should follow what most of ppl like anyway now the introduction nearly finished only 1 part then i start in chapter 1