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Edited by YagamiLi at 2015-3-29 11:26
Ragnos replied at 2015-3-29 11:00 ![]()
Once you have it extracted double click the small dragon icon. Thats it. Its been tested more than ...
so far im noticing some run-ons an stuff that needs fixin, mostly punctuation
like right after the flash back
"but for this to be possible a powerful magical catalyst to do so."
^ maybe cut out "to do so" and replace it with "is needed"
"But the catalyst could not be so powerful or it could warp time and space" - original, something just sounds off when i read it
"If the catalyst is too powerful it could warp time and space" my ver
"But the catalyst should not be too powerful that it may warp time and space" 2nd my ver
Black haired - red eyed man that greets you as you enter the tower - "I'm just here to help warriors get started with thier quest" thier should be their
"The going will be Hell let me tell you, and you may not make it out alive" I feel like and after the comma is redundant.
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